tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2959796723024074055.post1847299334750358781..comments2021-11-09T12:55:13.801-07:00Comments on Jo Ann Schneider: Query Letter-Round 1-Jo-http://www.blogger.com/profile/03994731857058276539noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2959796723024074055.post-75643253369534658432011-01-29T12:32:41.081-07:002011-01-29T12:32:41.081-07:00Me, I like it:) The eyeball thing would make me, ...Me, I like it:) The eyeball thing would make me, a fantasy reader, instantly more curious. Of course, at chapter 15, I'm only to the 3rd paragraph. I think it's an excellent blurb for a publishing company sell, as it tells enough of the plot so they know what you want them to buy.Tohruhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03979026628473569522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2959796723024074055.post-63434921036965594972011-01-29T08:58:15.543-07:002011-01-29T08:58:15.543-07:00errr Guild ridden? *blink* and I honestly wouldn...errr Guild ridden? *blink* and I honestly wouldn't lead with the eyeball thing. Honestly that's a image that may turn someone off instantly and not even finish reading the blurb. Also, I think you give too much of the plot away.Lace and Bookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12975097806204463062noreply@blogger.com